VN - Ren'Py - Lesson in Loyalty [Ch.4] [Lesson in Loyalty]

If you go back and play the Christmas version of Lust Of Pain and compare the quality of rendering to this game then you can make the argument that Vilkas Creative is one of the best artist around. Storytelling is another thing but he's getting there.


Story:

You're down on your luck which is totally normal as a lot of us has been there. You working as a teacher and part time personal trainer. You encounter a drop dead gorgeous woman from your past in Lilie and she's married..
Not mad at that but disappointed as there's clearly something between the two. She hooks you up with two other knock outs in need of tutoring for their kids. From there with see Rosa who's also married and has two kids, one of which you tutor. She's alone as her husband is temporarily out of the picture.

Now my worry with this situation is that this could turn into a cheating-fest. It's one of the reasons why people ask for tags.. There is a monogamous and romance crowd and I am a proud card carrying member. Now, I'm sure Netori fans may jump for joy but I personally am not too much into it. Besides that, there's also the fact that Rosa's husband actually seems like a caring and stand up guy. Who's only away from his family in the first place and that's to make money and put food the table. But she looks to be one of the main girls so it's sort of the elephant in the room thing for me. It's like cheating could be one of the ways to get lewd content. Same thing could be said for Lilie.

One thing I didn't like is of course the passiveness of the main character. Now, others have already called him things along the lines of: Wimpy, Cowardly, and other things and they're not wrong.

Look I'm not a UFC fighter, I'm not confrontational, I don't go looking for trouble but I'm also no one's PUSHOVER. So it really grinds my gears when I play a guy that can't even stand up for himself. He stares at two "Schoolgirls" and gets confronted by them and can't even defend himself? No guy who looks like the MC should be getting... punked out by "school girls" lol.

Then the same thing happens at the gym. "Hey, Loser!" Is what Jay calls the MC and he just takes it. And no, it wasn't in a jokingly manner as we saw Jay basically humiliate the MC in front of Jane. Luckily for the MC's sake Jane is a pretty bright person as she saw through Jay's bullshit and decided to ask the MC to be her personal trainer instead. But please, grow a pair and don't take 10 updates before you finally stand up for yourself.

Lastly, the Kevin situation.

Now every country is different but in my country it's illegal to leave your underage kid at home all alone in any circumstance. Here, we have this situation play out where the MC finds this kid whose crying because he accidentally locked himself out of the home and in comes the MC who offers to invite the kid into his home... for chocolate milk.

Yeah... Not in this climate.

I would've stayed in the hallway with him and waited until his mother came home. That way I cover my ass. But that's just what I would've done, it's different rules in different countries I know but better be safe than sorry. His mom, Kelly arrives, she gives her thanks and that's the end.

Not much to go on but again the visuals are damn near perfect, that's never been a real issue with this Dev in my opinion. I just haven't enjoyed his or their stories so far. Although Lust Of Pain is growing on me.

Dialogue:
There's good grammar and having good dialogue. There's a difference but some still haven't picked up on that.

This game for the most part doesn't have that glaring problem. There were instances where it stood out like the confrontations with the "schoolgirls"(Let's be real here, those were grown ass women not schoolgirls) where the dialogue got dicey. But not bad to the point where you can't understand what's going on.

Renders:
Superb

Characters:
The models are heavy on the beautiful side, if you're only into that then you'll love this but it felt like I was watching Beverly Hills, 90210 where everyone is extremely hot. Even on public transportation the MC was sitting in front of hotties. Adding a average model or two won't dissuade players, I promise. The MC himself is pretty handsome, I don't mind that at all. What I do mind is him stuttering around women. Like dude look in the mirror. Also he reminds me a lot of Æthelred from the Last Kingdom.

Overall:
This is project number 4 counting the rework so.. We'll see what becomes of this one. Good Luck.

I love the game and Yes it does resemble manwha which someone mentioned above. Every game is straight up a copy of other with minor changes or spinoff, etc. So, I don't care if that is the case, at least it is not like 1000 others but like 1 or two. Plus Graphics are great. I love Lillie (Redhead). I love how Dev tries to capture emotions and face expressions (talking about Lillie). Absolutely loved the story. At least it is far more interesting and greater than this previous games.

Absolutely loved the cast as of now(ch1)!

The ring scene was such a blow to the face But Loved the scene.

MC HAS to grow backbone soon otherwise signs are not looking great and story can take pretty dark turn if that is Planned, I hope not(3forbiddenwords). As of now it is giving only Netori vibes and MC is gonna do stealing.

Loved the cast and story as of now. Looking forward to next chapter.

KEEP GROWING!

GOLDLUCK!

Small initial version of the game, with not much content but has potential.

Models are very nice and realistic albeit "too pretty" but being a game and fantasy that is not really an issue.

The dialogue is not as good as it could be, there is some work needed to proof read and structure sentences better.

Characters that know the MC need more introduction, the one scene felt disconnected and a bit too forced to be a random coincidence.

The MC is a beta male that is as they always are to me, highly annoying to play as, but I suspect that the developer purposefully made the MC this way to suggest and start on a low confidence character that gradually gains more confidence to become an alpha. I hope!

As said, early days, but good start, can go a few places or absolutely nowhere, lets see what happens in a few updates. Hopefully they wont be too small and occur in reasonable time-frames.

This is a nice start, and it's going to be a real treat for those who love milfs and women of the married variety.

The MC is almost so down on his luck, i started wondering if he pissed off a witch. This cat is cursed! The cool thing about it, however, is that he not only hangs onto hope but remains a good man despite his obvious troubles and despair.

If I had one complaint with this game, it is so sickening and difficult to watch a man continuously punked. And not just by men, but f-ing schoolgirls too. I hope this guy's character arc from "zero to hero" starts soon, because this sh*t is hard to watch.

That said, I look forward to seeing where this magic carpet takes us -- just so long as homeboy grows a pair.