VN Ren'Py The Nature of Magic [Ch.1] [Slate Interactive]

[Faptime]

I haven't tried it, so I want to clarify. So, the MC plays a more passive role in building his harem and his fiancee does the main work?

MC was literally living in the woods to escape from the Six Families and their politics. For his protection, the head of one of the families has taken him in and engaged him to one of the old man's granddaughters (who was friends with MC in college).

So MC is learning all of the political stuff for the first time, and his fiancee (who was groomed to be heir) is showing him the way.

As players, we'll have the choice as to which of the 8(?) already established LIs that MC will be romantically involved with, but the Dev is making it clear that MC's fiancee is down with MC spreading his magic seed far and wide.

Look for MC to become more active over time as he learns more about his situation, responsibilities, and privileges.

 

[sudo_nim]

MC was literally living in the woods to escape from the Six Families and their politics. For his protection, the head of one of the families has taken him in and engaged him to one of the old man's granddaughters (who was friends with MC in college).

So MC is learning all of the political stuff for the first time, and his fiancee (who was groomed to be heir) is showing him the way.

As players, we'll have the choice as to which of the 8(?) already established LIs that MC will be romantically involved with, but the Dev is making it clear that MC's fiancee is down with MC spreading his magic seed far and wide.

Look for MC to become more active over time as he learns more about his situation, responsibilities, and privileges.

Was about to post something very similar to this, myself. Chapter One is indeed very much an introduction of the world and characters for both the player and player character. I noted this in a previous post, but the MC will be growing into his role, both in terms of his magic and in terms of the relationships with the LIs. Chapter Two will see the start of this.

 

[Juerhullycin]

*gluck* *gluck* *gluck* *gluck*

take that cock out of your mouth when you have something to say

 

[Steinchen]

Was about to post something very similar to this, myself. Chapter One is indeed very much an introduction of the world and characters for both the player and player character. I noted this in a previous post, but the MC will be growing into his role, both in terms of his magic and in terms of the relationships with the LIs. Chapter Two will see the start of this.

then make a prologue at the start of the game to explain your "world" then nobody would question it.

you must admit that there is not really a explanation how your world Eorthe in your game works,so it is easy to see it from the wrong view.
and secondly if the two of them where always like that since they know each other it should not be one sided.
that would look much better from every angle.
and another thing: if Cerys and the MC know each other for what 7 years or more he should know how the world around him works no???
Especially if Cymhen is still in Contact with mc mother even before and after he disappeared for 5 years they should know the ways of Eorthe??

and lastly : do not make the MC someone "special" since gamestart when he is just some male magic user that lived in the wood for 5 years on his own.
Cerys granddad wanted the MC to come with him even before he knew that he has a "different" way to do magic.
so before he knew that he was just a random man who could use magic and has not been fetched away from other families.

so please less fuss about how "special" he is...... because he.is.not...YET

 

[Lerd0]

Chapter Two will see the start of this.

 

[Juerhullycin]

and secondly if the two of them where always like that since they know each other it should not be one sided.
that would look much better from every angle.

I didnt even give that comment of the dev any thought but to be honest its pretty shitty ^.^

Cery thought MC didnt have magic and MC is described as socially awkward in his youth because he was hiding his affinity, in other words the school prodigy from the noble house of the Gryms was shitting on the social outcast while they were at school.

And this people is why the one-sidedness of the pranks in the first Chapter isn't not good writing. Yes they love each other but their relationship is a completely different one to the one they had at school the MC is a different person so is Cery.

so the whole "the two of them where always like that" doesnt hold under scrutiny at least not if MC is this passive.

 

[MadMoonMan69]

 

[MidnightKing]

Maybe some people just have reading comprehension issues. I'll chalk it up to that

 

[thrainz]

It's a good game in itself, but I have a few things that bother me.
As some previous speakers have pointed out, cerys comes across as a starving lesbian. And it does indeed seem more like she wants the girls and only cares about the MC to a limited extent.
It doesn't help when she often says darling or my fiancé - it seems to me as if it's just a game for her and she doesn't take it seriously.
I have also seen in the Planned tags that it says Virgin who is a virgin? So far it seems like it's normal to go from house to house and fuck around. I mean don't take offence but so far every woman in there seems like an experienced woman.
Take Cerys for example where she gave the mc a blowjob and the way she talked or what she said as if she had already sucked 1000 cocks it comes across as if she was the bad bitch while mc was away.
Although he confessed to her that he was just waiting for her and she herself said that she loved him so much, where was the love? or is it intentionally written in such a way that it can be ambiguous or misunderstood? And I really hope that we can get a grip on the lesbian tum and completely avoid that none of the women can have anything with anyone unless you explicitly allow it as mc I mean after all we are the demon even if you don't see anything of it anymore.

 

[MadMoonMan69]

I don't really want to speak for Sudo about the world he is creating, but it is radically different to my expectations in a lot of ways! But I don't know enough about this world, or where the story is going to criticise!
It seems like the family members are only seen as assets to be used for the good of the family name.
There are a lot more women with powers than men and that they are expected to mostly have relationships with others like themselves. So it would be seen as more normal (OK) for a bit of muff diving to let off steam!
Just because the girls know how to suck a cock doesn't mean they can't be virgins! Don't forget Gods loophole

Personally, I think the only thing stopping this world from becoming a matriarchal society is the number of "Normal" men.
This story is one of the most impressive 1st efforts I have seen in while! I love it and it's humour, and I can't wait for more!

 

[LostGhost]

If the developer is here, just don't stack words/sentences on single dialogue box split them into multiple dialogues and let a character speak multiple dialogues in a row

Reading parah of a dialogue without proper sentence break was annoying

The different words and sounds you've chosen was alright but if you don't mind try new horizon and how it used dialogue writing (technical version of it not style)

 

[LostGhost]

It's a good game in itself, but I have a few things that bother me.
As some previous speakers have pointed out, cerys comes across as a starving lesbian. And it does indeed seem more like she wants the girls and only cares about the MC to a limited extent.
It doesn't help when she often says darling or my fiancé - it seems to me as if it's just a game for her and she doesn't take it seriously.
I have also seen in the Planned tags that it says Virgin who is a virgin? So far it seems like it's normal to go from house to house and fuck around. I mean don't take offence but so far every woman in there seems like an experienced woman.
Take Cerys for example where she gave the mc a blowjob and the way she talked or what she said as if she had already sucked 1000 cocks it comes across as if she was the bad bitch while mc was away.
Although he confessed to her that he was just waiting for her and she herself said that she loved him so much, where was the love? or is it intentionally written in such a way that it can be ambiguous or misunderstood? And I really hope that we can get a grip on the lesbian tum and completely avoid that none of the women can have anything with anyone unless you explicitly allow it as mc I mean after all we are the demon even if you don't see anything of it anymore.

She did seemed like that but she also said she wasn't seeing anyone after MC gone BTW i would want the girls to be virgins cause honey select games spoiled me

 

[wiseold6996]

It's a good game in itself, but I have a few things that bother me.
As some previous speakers have pointed out, cerys comes across as a starving lesbian. And it does indeed seem more like she wants the girls and only cares about the MC to a limited extent.
It doesn't help when she often says darling or my fiancé - it seems to me as if it's just a game for her and she doesn't take it seriously.
I have also seen in the Planned tags that it says Virgin who is a virgin? So far it seems like it's normal to go from house to house and fuck around. I mean don't take offence but so far every woman in there seems like an experienced woman.
Take Cerys for example where she gave the mc a blowjob and the way she talked or what she said as if she had already sucked 1000 cocks it comes across as if she was the bad bitch while mc was away.
Although he confessed to her that he was just waiting for her and she herself said that she loved him so much, where was the love? or is it intentionally written in such a way that it can be ambiguous or misunderstood? And I really hope that we can get a grip on the lesbian tum and completely avoid that none of the women can have anything with anyone unless you explicitly allow it as mc I mean after all we are the demon even if you don't see anything of it anymore.

What blowjob?

 

[Juerhullycin]

What blowjob?

the one she gave MC?

 

[wiseold6996]

the one she gave MC?

I did not get any such scene

 

[el_kabong]

I haven't tried it, so I want to clarify. So, the MC plays a more passive role in building his harem and his fiancee does the main work?

It really depends on the LI. With Cerys (the fiancee) and her family (sister and aunt) I wouldn't say that's true at all, it's either the MC driving things or mutual effort from both parties. With the others from each of "the families", Ch1 ends before there is any significant development with any of them, but it would make sense if Cerys were more involved as they are all her friends but don't know MC at all.

The rest of that description is pretty accurate though, Cerys does seem pretty thirsty for her friends (and for her friends to be with MC), and there definitely seem to be a plan to forge The One Cock going on.

 

[e6mill]

but it would make sense if Cerys were more involved as they are all her friends but don't know MC at all.

Other hand is that MC doesn't really have to do anything. He's male and he's a mage. One of 2 who are of virile age. So he's going to be in high demand. Especially (I'd think) among the other mage's close family. Because nobody wants defective inbred mage babies running around, right? Right?
(Love your screen name BTW Quick Draw )

 

[BTungsteno]

Pretty good first chapter, I also have reservation with the main LI but i like Her so far.
Can't wait to see how this vn will develop in the future.
Good luck Dev!!

 

[tmu500]

interesting but very wordy dialogs.

 

[ImSenjou]

I liked the game, but it hasn't been what I expected, especially when it comes to Cerys.

As mentioned before, she seems to be a lesbian, and is more interested in the girls than the MC, and as the MC I was uncomfortable with that, I expected more interest or passion from her; a path where the MC chooses to be only with her, if it exists, must be uncomfortable to watch.

About their engagement, she seems happy that her fiancé is someone she knows and has a good relationship with and not a stranger or someone she dislikes, but she doesn't seem over the moon about being engaged to him.

Maybe because of her character design, I already expected a girl in love, happy to see her crush and hear that she's going to marry him, as she would have wanted, but thought it was impossible to happen, but I didn't see that, I was surprised to hear her confess her crush on him as embarrassed as she was, she hadn't shown that expression before at any time that I remember.

I confess that my interest in her is very low at the moment, I'm hoping that one of these other girls will offer what I expect in a relationship.

The problem is probably my expectations, so don't see this comment as me asking for changes to the game, it's just my opinion after playing.

I think I have such a strong opinion about her because based on what I expected from her, and her design, as soon as I saw her I thought she would be my favorite, but that wasn't the case.

The confession about the crush should have been at the beginning and not at the end of the chapter.